Final blog

        Using blogger has benefited me a lot.  Since I was aware that people will be viewing my blog, I made sure that my writing is well organized and neatly written.  I made sure that I proof read my writing for grammar and spelling errors. During this semester of school, I feel like my writing has improved a lot.  My essay development skills were weak before, but after taking this class it got better. Hope I continue to expand writing skills.

Revision of blog #7 "The woman who died in the waiting room"

           I have heard stories of people dying in the hospital waiting area in other countries but not in the United States. This came as a surprise to everyone I believe. " The women who died in the waiting room" written by Jeneen Interlandi, talks about a 49 years old women, who passed away in a waiting room of a Brooklyn hospital. She fell out of her chair and was struggling between two chairs for 20 minutes, while nurses and security cameras failed to help her. After 40 minutes, a nurse went to check up on her, but by that time the helpless woman passed away. " Public hospitals across the country have struggled to provide acute psychiatric care to the poor and uninsured", I completely agree with the author's statement.

              Sometimes it makes me wonder why people especially highly educated people fail to understand the meaning of the word " Emergency". One reason why I agree with the author's statement is because last summer I had to make a trip to the emergency room in my neighborhood. My younger cousin fell off from his bike and got a pretty deep cut on his forehead. I somehow managed to stop the bleeding, but we all know how kids react when they get injured. I rushed him to the emergency room and was waiting there for good 3 hours to be seen. Finally, one nurse came and give him stitches. I am aware of the fact that our economical condition isn't that stable now, but we cannot compromise with people's health.
           
          Many people cannot afford medical insurance, therefore they cant make regular visits to the doctors.
Even though their illnesses can be cured with just regular medication, they happen to make more visits to the
emergency.Another reason why I agree with the author's statement is because my tenant was really sick passed winter.After going to apply for medical insurance many times he gave up. He was too sick so his wife took him to the hospital. The hospital bill was really high that they told my parents, they wont be able to pay the rent on time for that month. His wife mentioned to me that after spending so much money for the medication, along with the hospital bill, she really didn't think the service was worth it. She seen nurses mostly taking their time and doing their own things at a very slow pace.

          These are two examples of some incidents I have been though and heard of. As we all can see and tell that hospitals in the United States need more work to be done. They need to hire more people to be able to give better service.

Blog 6: Personal Directions for The CATW

           On the day of the test, the first thing I will do is eat a full and healthy breakfast, after all no work can be done with an empty stomach.  I will arrive to school before time, so I dont run late. As soon as I receive the passage, I will read it once to know what the passage is about, and than read it again to underline the main ideas and important details that the author stated. After that I will choose one significant idea stated in the passage and make a outline using examples to support the significant idea I choose. On my intro paragraph I will start with a introductory sentences or two, summarize the original passage, and add thesis. As I was taught in class that always quote the significant idea and mention to agree or disagree with the idea on the intro paragraph. Than I will write two body paragraphs each with a reason and example relevant to the significant idea I choose. My last paragraph will be my conclusion, in which I will write few sentences raping up the whole essay.

           Some things I will have to look out for when writing my essay are vocabulary, spelling errors, and how to put my words on paper. I know the type of vocabulary words that I want to use but sometimes I forget their spellings. And the reasons and examples that support my significant idea for the body paragraphs come to my mind but I have hard time putting them on paper. Its like I know what I am saying but dont know how to put them in writing.

           I figured out how to help myself with these problems. For the vocabulary and spelling errors, I will bring a dictonary on the day of the test. And about putting my words on paper, I will make a outline before writing the actual essay. That way I will be able to know what excatly to mention and in which tone, so the reader follows my point of view and understands it.
          

Blog # 5

       From the movie "Gone baby Gone" most of the characters for example Remy, Lionel and Angie believe in the philosophy of consequentialism.  According to them they think the best way to serve the best to Amanda is to keep Amanda away from her uncaring mother Helene. They believe that Amanda will have a better future if she stays with Remy. He can give her a safe environment to live in, good education, provide her with all the things she will need and above all give her the love and affection that she deserves. Towards the end of the movie it showed how Amanda looked very happy and was being taken under good care by Remy and his wife, which actually proved that Amanda can and most likely will be raised with love and attention.
       Patrick on the other hand believes in ethical absolutism. He believes the best for Amanda would be staying with her mother Helene. He believes that no one has the right to take a child away from their mother, even though he sees the uncaring nature of Helene. During the conversation that Remy and Patrick were having at the end of the movie, Pratrick stated that he doesnt want to face Amanda when she will grow up and ask him why did he leave her with some strangers? Why didnt he take her back to her mother, to her real family? He mentioned that living under the guilt of leaving her behind will never let him forgive himself.
        From my point of view I think that the movie took the side of consequentialism. At the end of the movie it showed that Amanada wasnt being looked after. The tragedy of loosing Amanda once didnt bring any changes to Helene's behavior. Amanda was just sitting by her self and watching tv, now that neither Lionel or his wife were there to look after her.

CATW pratice 2

           "The women who died in the waiting room" written by Jeneen Interlandi, talks about a 49-year-old wome, who passed away in a waiting room of a brooklyn hospital. She fell out of her chair and was struggling between two chairs for 20 minutes, while nurses and security cameras failed to help her. After 40 minuties, a nurse went to check up on her, but by that time the helpless woman woman passed away. "Public hospitals across the country have struggled to provide acute psychiatic care to the poor and uninsured", I completely agree with the author's statement.
            Sometimes it makes me wonder why people especially highly educated people fail to understand the meaning of the word "emergency". One reason why i agree with the authoers statement is because last summer I had to make a trip to the emergency room in my neighborhood. My younger cousin fell off his bike and got a pretty deep cut on his forehead. I somehow managed to stop the bleeding, but we all know how kids react, when they get injured. I rushed him to the emergency room and was waiting there for good 3 hours to be seen by a nurse. Finally, one nurse came give him stiches. I am aware of the fact that our economical condition isnt that stable now, but we cannot compromise people's health.
           Many people cannot afford medical insurance, therefore they cant make regular visits to the doctors. Even though their illness can be cured with just regular medication, they happen to make more visits to emergency. After spending so much moeny for the medication, along with the hospital bill, I really dont think the service is worth it. I always see nurses mostly taking their time and doing their own things. The question I ask is how long does it take to just devote little of your time to check a needy patient? If you have a chance to cure someone that why not?
           Many questions will rise and many comemnts will be make because heakth is our first concern.
 

Revision of CATW 1

               In this passage experpted from " An Education in Citizenship", it states that the House of Illinios has recently passed a bill that would allow young people who are non-citizen to pay in-state tuition rate at the colleges and Universities. In the fifth paragraph the author states that "why will we charge legal citizens from the other states more for tuition than we charge the non-citizen immigrants". I compeletly agree.
              It is totally unfair for legal students to have to pay more money for college tuitions while illegal students get to pay the half amount of the tuition and get the same level of education.  This would be unjust to the citizens of the U.S.  Since the federal taxes that the parents of legal citizens pay help support the Pell Grants and other loan options that is being provided for the illegal students in Illinios. Than why should the legal students have to pay more money for education while their parents are helping the department of education?
            A very close friend of mine is a citizen and he is attending a highly reputative college out state.  His parents have paid so much money for the education of their son. He recently found out that some of his classmates are not paying as much as he is because they are not legal in the U.S. Which is absurd! All along we have been believing that being a citizen of the United States gives you more benifits but in this case its the other way around. This quesions the governement and the law makers.  
    Therefore, the bill that the House of Illinios have passed seems unfair to the citizens. It really doesnt make sense why should they get to pay more than the illegal immigrants.    


      
              

Blog 3: Response to"HYPE"

            The increase of tv commercials, dislplay ads, and radio commercials have been increasing continuesly, but so is our population. Every month we have companies coming up with new ideas and new products that they introduce to the public. In this passage "Hype" by Kalle Lasn, she states that "advertisements are the most prevalent and toxic of the mental pollutants". I disagree with the authors point of view.
            As technology is getting better day by day, companies are finding different ways of promoting their products. One reason I disagree with the authors point of view is because from my personal experience I have been to few business fairs, where I have seen companies come up with different type of new products, that they think would be useful to the public needs. Its surprising to see how comapines come up with many different ideas at the table, but not all of them get the approved to be sold. The ones that do get the approval by higher attoraty, they start off by putting big sales tag on the product so that everyone can afford to buy it.
         Each year people wait for the biggest sales. And these sales will tell another reason why I disagree with the authors point of view. For example, every christmas we get huge discount on lather coats, jeans, sweaters, kids wear and etc. How will we the public get informed of these once a year sale if there was no way of knowing about it? This is why these advertisements are being played over and over again through tv and radio. For those of us, who are busy with college, study and work, the ads that scroll up on our bank machine are one of the ways of getting to know whats the best way to save money.
         Now a days not everyone has enough time to sit and watch tv. Therefore companies post billboard ads to catch the public attention. Commericals are way of informing everyone about new deals in the town. It gives a way for the public to save money, and business comapines a way to make money.